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thanks. you learn something new everyday.

i'm sorry i forgot punctuation again! :cry:

But tomorrow, oh don't use the "oh". and listen to backgroundbob. =]

don't force rhymes, increase your vocabulary and read some poetry. it's more about rhythm and meaning than anything else. so don't force something that won't come.

short and sweet. symbolic or not, the chocolate images sweetened my day.

try again...just not on the...same subject. stop the repetition and research poetry - try at first by reading some...

*grimances* well, it was a good poem but it repelled me from christianity, when i was trying to desperately to hang on i don't know. it sort of killed that ...

add line breaks as boni bee suggested. otherwise, this was cute. sort of dr. suess-like. bite yer. bite yer? lmao

short, sweet, beautiful. listen to bob - he's the king of rhythm.

this wasn't really bad at all, and, like areida said, bob pretty much covered it all. the whole starting with "little kitten running free" sort of makes me shiver, but ...

you used a lot of simplistic words, which, i SUPPOSE, could be a good thing. but it fit the shakespearan sonnet format and worked well, fullfilling it's message.

this was repetitive, and you need to fix the " when there should be ' it is a good point, though.

i loved the ending...the middle dragged on a bit, but since it was all so beautiful, i did not mind so much. in fact, the entire thing filled my dull ...

wierd = W-E-I-R-D add line breaks. also, although this poem is cute, i urge you to tackle something more prominent and less like a second grade love letter in quality, ...

are you kidding me? i think my brain just died. nonetheless, it's cool, if not just decidely true. :lol: